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#1 | Posted: 19 Dec 2013 17:57
I consider myself to be an intellectual with various mental abilities...but ultimately it is all about creativity.

My favorite/strongest area is within the literary category and thus i can identify myself with authors.

Having patience for trying to write a book with several hundred pages is not in my interest. Writing lyrics? Yes, that seems much more interesting and fun. Lyrics are short and vary.

I have not much experience within the art of lyrics itself...i know a lyric contain verses and chorus. Heeeh!

Mutual interest would be desired, if i could develop or collaborate within the area of lyrics.

Only once have i tried to write lyrics: it was during a visit in the U.S.A. and all of a sudden i felt like testing to write lyrics. I called a local musicshop over the phone and asked for directions. The person told me to rhyme. So...during two weeks i wrote 52 different double A4-paged lyrics ( i tried to vary the form of rhyming, etc. as to avoid being unilateral...and i always tried to use simple english as to cater to a supposed audience. )

Contacting the musicshop again, the person told me over the phone that i had to shorten each lyric down to an A4-page. Baaaah! So, i did! And then....i copyrighted my 52 lyrics with the "Library Of Congress" 1993.

I consider myself to have potential mental abilities, mostly literal ( but not only - i have also dealt with innovations and creating puzzles ), but i am not sure where or how to start to utilize it commercially?

Here is my VERY FIRST lyric i wrote 1993. It is more of a casual nature and within the dance-category. An overwhelming majority of my 52 lyrics are about man-woman-relationship. Yes, the lyric is long ( all originals are double A4-page...as mentioned ).

PS! I recently found two more lyrics from 1993, but they are more like poetry. I donīt like poetry...sorry! One of the new lyrics i found have 31 sentences and the other 42...superfluos content i believe.

Grab on to that beat!

Sipping drinks with scanning eyes, you do! Hey there, do you see something?
Your alert eyes are wide, your heart is beating, your body is tense and shortly
you start coming to a sense.


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Dancing on the floor with wiggleing butts, flinging heads, spasmatic legs and
with jerky arms you are!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


You there, grab on to the small one, the tall one, the slim one, the skinny one,
the fat one, the ugly one, the gorgeous one, grab yourself, but do your dancing
thing! Hey, ugly ones, do not sing!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


We are swetting with thirst, exhausting with pleasure, moving to the beat and
screaming like retards!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Do not step on your partnerīs toes, slap someoneīs face, behave with disgrace,
but dance as for a race! Dancing like hell, we are! Hey, drinking too much will not
get you dancing too far! Do not just sit at the bar!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Grab on to each other and do the "leg-swing", but do not cause someoneīs head
to ring! Any swing is fine, but stay in line! So, getting tired we are? Oh, no no no no
no, you are insane to complain! Oh, do not be so vain! Rest, if you are in such a
pain! But, hey, then you grab on to the beat again!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Well, here we go again! Centering in with your eyes, you are! Who is that you are
looking at? Are you looking to eat that rat or, ahha, to proove that your lust does
not have a flat?


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Oh, so we are approaching now? You think that person will like you? Grab on then,
which you intended anyway! What will you say? Hi, i am Ray! And i suppose you are Fay?


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Going to a private place, are we? Hey, avoid any fume and do not let anyone you
with **** exhume!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
morti meni  
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#2 | Posted: 20 Dec 2013 04:01 | Edited by: morti meni
well, as u said, it need to edit but everyone has a favorite style:


Pre-chorus:
Hey there

chorus:
Grab on to that beat
and move your feet
or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat!
Larry Killam  
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#3 | Posted: 20 Dec 2013 11:13
way too long for a song me thinks.I like the suggestion.All the best with it.
Mary McClain  
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#4 | Posted: 20 Dec 2013 14:12
I'm with Larry on this song. It's way to long to be a song and needs to editted down to even have a chance to be made into a song.

Remember most songs are no longer then 5 minutes long because the longer the song is there's more of a chance you will lose your audience with longer running songs.
Nick Randall  
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#5 | Posted: 20 Dec 2013 23:04
Agree with the others on this one about the length, and to me the chorus line 'or go and take a leak' is not going to hold my interest very well.

Some of the content in the verses has potential, and I would suggest looking at it again and maybe include some description of the club [I guess this is where it is set] and avoid descriptions of others which could be heard as putdowns of people who are not blessed with beautiful looks and smarts.
This could widen its appeal quite a bit I think, but as others have said everyone's opinion is different.
Have great Christmas and thanks for sharing
B4N3M4N  
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#6 | Posted: 21 Dec 2013 11:03 | Edited by: B4N3M4N
Yes, as i stated, my 52 lyrics i wrote 1993 are all double A4-page...so it is too much content.

I just shared my first lyric ever written, out of the 52, and wrote what came to my mind and with no particular category in mind. But i like though some kind of storytelling, then i primarily identify myself as a person with authorcapabilities. Then...i also like twisted humor.

That is why any of my lyrics written or lyrics i would write in the future could be modified by the one i would collaborate with....in such instance. The literary is of no concern to me...my brainfuel is still active!
morti meni  
Forums Member
#7 | Posted: 21 Dec 2013 14:53
in verse/ chorus structure listener will remember just chorus
well, you have a background for line story of your verse
if your verse1 has 4 lines, your verse2 should be with 4 lines
if first line of your verse1 has 8 beats, first line of your verse 2 should be with 8 beats
'cause all of your verses have same rhythm
in chorus you should say a rhythmic message
message & rhythm are more important than rhyme
Larry Killam  
Forums Member
#8 | Posted: 21 Dec 2013 16:05
Song radio edit length

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Radio_edit

For Am I would say 2 t0 3 minutes

Fm up to five but most people are like children 2-3 minute time span
Larry Killam  
Forums Member
#9 | Posted: 21 Dec 2013 16:09
I agree with Nick on take a leak in a song doesn't really interest me either.
B4N3M4N  
Forums Member
#10 | Posted: 21 Dec 2013 19:26
morti meni:
message & rhythm are more important than rhyme

I agree!
B4N3M4N  
Forums Member
#11 | Posted: 21 Dec 2013 19:27
Larry Killam:
I agree with Nick on take a leak in a song doesn't really interest me either.

Heeh!

Yes, itīs immature and unfitting as one canīt view it as humorus enough!
 
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