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The very air I breathe

 
Carroll Kiphen  
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#1 | Posted: 9 Jan 2012 03:37
The very air I breathe

I can't believe that you can't see
You mean the world to me.
I need you in my life
Like the very air I breathe.

I'm a desert with no oasis.
I'm a night without the stars.
I'm a garden with no flowers
if I'm not where you are.

There's no paradise in Eden
if Adam's not with Eve.
I need you in my world
Like the very air I breathe.

I'm a ship with no ocean.
I'm a bird without the sky.
I'm a fire with no oxygen
to keep me burning bright.

I can't believe that you can't see
You mean the world to me.
I need you in my life
Like the very air I breathe.

I'm a song with no melody.
I'm a day without light.
I'm a guitar with no strings
to put the music in my life.

There's no paradise in Eden
if Adam's not with Eve.
I need you in my life
Like the very air I breathe.
Olivia Jorgene Rodriguez  
Forums Member
#2 | Posted: 14 Jan 2012 17:51
its very lyrical...i like the part about Adam and Eve, but the other parts..honestly..just slip my mind..sorry!!! and im pretty critical too...but its pretty okay
Carroll Kiphen  
Forums Member
#3 | Posted: 15 Jan 2012 07:25
Probably more suited to the tween market .
Olivia Jorgene Rodriguez  
Forums Member
#4 | Posted: 15 Jan 2012 14:42
Most likely . . . it's not bad though if it's suited for that market. If it sells, it sells you know?
 
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