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Allison Burt  
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#1 | Posted: 28 Mar 2012 19:24
Againl, I would like constructive criticism. I am not easily offended and love getting addvice. Just type any thoughts you have on this piece or any of my pieces. I always post any lyrics I have finished or think need work but want advice on how to finish them on here. So if you check my page I will have new songs posted all the time. Thanks!

Tina Rina Butterfly

I was just a small town girl,
Living in a small world
I never sat still and I never will
So my daddy called me
Tina Rina Butterfly

At times I think my daddy thought,
'Tina Rina Butterfly,
Don't use your wings to fly
Just stay with me by and by'
But I still flew
And I now know things I never knew

I've traveled the world
No longer that little girl
Who lived in a small town
And had nothing to regret
But I am
Tina Rina Butterfly

At times I think my daddy thought,
'Tina Rina Butterfly,
Please never use your wings to fly
Just stay with me by and by'
But I still flew
And I know things I never knew

I am God's creation
And have flown all over the nation
I've seen many sights
Even been under the lights
Landed on flowers of love
But soon returned to the sky above
I may have settled now But I'll always be
Tina Rina Butterfly

At times I think my daddy thought,
'Tina Rina Butterfly,
Never use your wings to fly
Just stay with me by and by'
But I still flew
And I know things I never knew
I ama nd will always be
Tina Rina Butterfly
morti meni  
Forums Member
#2 | Posted: 7 Nov 2012 07:32
I was just a small town girl,
Living in a small world with no furl
I never sat still and I never will
So my daddy called me
Tina Rina Butterfly

i was lover & crazy with goodbye
i flew over flower by and by'
like a cup full of wine
my days went side by side

with flower, with candle,
I traveled all over the world
No longer that little girl
Who lived in a small town
And had nothing to regret
But I ama nd will always be
Tina Rina Butterfly
So my daddy called me
Tina Rina Butterfly

I 'm an angel and God's creation
And have flown all over the nation
I've seen face of sights
Even been under the lights
Landed on flowers of love
But soon returned to the sky above
I may have settled now But I'll always be
Tina Rina Butterfly
So my daddy called me
Tina Rina Butterfly

i'm sorry because of fly over your lyric & destroy it, but i think your daddy thought

is not this
ever use your wings to fly
Just stay with me by and by'
 
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