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morti meni  
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#1 | Posted: 3 Sep 2014 10:22
I translated the Chorus of an old Persian song & I used it in my bridge:

Your memory{ hits} my heart every sunset
my share of being with you is the bitter sorrow of sunset
Sunset has always been for me a sign of you
{It's a keepsake to me and without it I 've nothing of you}


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5_OHRQuHxx0

(translated by Realitycalls):

Your memory {pounds}my heart every sunset
my share of being with you is the bitter sorrow of sunset
Sunset has always been for me a sign of you
{just a memory, nothing else is left of you}

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Verse1:
Turn on the mobile, gimme the birth
Missing me & reading my SMS
Close your eyes to the things you don't want to see
I remember your closed eyes while kissing me

Chorus:
It doesn't matter if we 're not looking eyes to eyes
Distances are always loser opponents for memories
I remember you more than the many sunsets you could ever count
Your heart 's the smiley sun to me when you come around


Verse2:
Turn off the TV, do not watch the news
It's the magic box & house of deuce
Greed is definition of idealness & we
Guess paradise has trouble readjusting to you & me

Chorus:
It doesn't matter if we 're not looking eyes to eyes
Distances are always loser opponents for memories
I remember you more than the many sunsets you could ever count
Your heart 's the smiley sun to me when you come around


Bridge:
Sunset has always been to me a sign of you
It's a keepsake to me and without it I 've nothing of you
Your memory hits my heart every sunset
Till I share with you the promise of sunset


Chorus:
It doesn't matter if we 're not looking eyes to eyes
distances are always loser opponents for memories
I remember you more than the many sunsets you could ever count
Your heart 's the smiley sun to me when you come around
 
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