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Salah elkadry Male  
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#1 | Posted: 17 May 2011 02:22 | Edited by: Salah elkadry
Hi all , i'm Salah from Egypt..
I used to listen to rock songs, and i don't like the Egyptian songs cause most of them has no sensation, just some music and rhyme words but not deep feelings , that's why i love rock it's full of deep feelings , anyway my dream is to live and work as a songwriter in USA ..
I am pretty much good poet as my friends said and also people who comments on my poems online, i have wrote 8 poems since i start writing (1 and a half month ago) and i was wondering if i can transform my poems to songs, i've read a lot about song structure and stuff, and this is my first "Song" ever ... i want you guyz to tell me if it's good or i should change something and tell me also if some expressions were wrong or don't make sense , cause English is my second language, i need your honest opinion, and i need someone to put music to my lyrics .. here it is...
http://www.songwritingfever.com/material/lyrics/read.php?id=5566
i hope you tell me what u think about it cya
Brenton  
Forums Member
#2 | Posted: 19 May 2011 21:17
Hello,
My name is Brenton. I am from the U.S. and I think it's pretty good for your first song. I write poems as well. What kind of poems do you write?
Salah elkadry Male  
Forums Member
#3 | Posted: 19 May 2011 21:34
Hey Brenton, nice 2 meet ya,
Well I like to write rhymes poems, here 2 of my favorite ones..
this one called "One last breath" >>> http://www.songwritingfever.com/material/lyrics/read.php?id=5591
and this one called "Inspiration" >>> http://www.songwritingfever.com/material/lyrics/read.php?id=5592
and all are copyrighted , i wish to collaborate with someone to finish this lyrics as a song , and someone to write music...
and please tell me your notes , i'll be glade to know
Brenton  
Forums Member
#4 | Posted: 19 May 2011 21:48
Well my favorite poem is the one wrote my friend Ezekiel for him to perform at this christian concert. It's called Almost (Saved). You see his performance on youtube if you like. And my second favorite is the one I wrote for my g.f. it's called 'The Girl of My Dreams'. Iit's kind of funny but I love to make her laugh. It goes:

When I first saw you
My drool began to spill
And though I was scared at first
Im gonna tell you how I feel
You brighten up my day
When its like a black hole
Your smile warms me up
When my life is getting cold
The best times of my day are spent with you
Along with everyone of your curls
My love for you has grew
If I could pick the last thing
I would hear before I died
I would choose your name
Just to keep you by my side
Everytime you look my way
My soul begins to scream
Because your the love of my life
And the Girl Of My Dreams

I also have copyrights for all of my poems. You can never be to safe you know. Anyway those are my two favs and you are really good.
Salah elkadry Male  
Forums Member
#5 | Posted: 19 May 2011 22:06
Thanks man, i like you poem too
Brenton  
Forums Member
#6 | Posted: 19 May 2011 22:15
thx
 
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