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Bob Morel  
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#1 | Posted: 16 Oct 2011 10:06
Hopefully this will post the second time. I am looking for positive and negative feedback on the folloing lyrics.

Consequences
Written By Robert Morel 8/11/11

In a not so simple world
Many find it hard to cope
What brings them to the breaking point
Where they lose all sense of hope
Do they know the pain they're causing
Is lasting and very real
I guess it never crossed their mind
That time won't always heal

Chorus
So many questions
And not enough answers
Too many whys
And too many what if's
It's too late for should of's
And way too late for could of's
The consequences
Of the choice not to live



What made them pull the trigger
Or shoot poison through their vein
Ingest a lethal dosage
Or take on a speeding train
No matter how they do it
The result is still the same
Survivors left to face their grief
And the memory of a name

Chorus

Bridge
Life is a gift from God
You should never throw away.
Cherish all the time you have
And be thankful everyday
Living life's not be easy
But it's worth living still the same.
You're more than just a body
You're more than just a name.

Chorus

Yes there's consequences
In the choice not to live.

Thank you in advance!
The Concerned Conservative  
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#2 | Posted: 16 Oct 2011 11:34
I read through your lyrics and I like the concept. I see the verses seem to deal with suicide and life being meaningless, the chorus seems to be a lot about hope and moving forward and the bridge reassures reality in the situation. I wonder how this song would be with music? I think it sounds great.
Bob Morel  
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#3 | Posted: 16 Oct 2011 11:56
Thank you, I appreciate the fedback.
 
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