hi, im busy writing a song that basically represents certain things in my life, each line has it's own full story... Anyway i need some feedback on it so far, and im not requesting a collaboration to finish the lyrics i just need some feedback and suggestions if necesary...
I dont wanna lose you but i am so lost,
how do i find all the things that are gone?,
and you, i want you to know that i love you.
Trying to move forward accepting mistakes,
the past is the past it's what has made today,
and you, i need you to know what im saying is true.
(im still working on it...)
staring at the ceiling falling to the ground,
finding the lost things and losing the found,
when you stop looking back and look ahead,
know now that everything has been said.
Staring at the ceiling falling to the floor,
the things that's forgotten apearing once more,
when the sky is blue and blood turned to red,
know now that everything has been said...
As i said earlier, each line has it's own meaning... For example the line in the chorus "when the sky is blue and blood turned to red" means when everything goes back to normal - no more worrying about the past and every apology has been accepted and forgotten...
So, what do you think?