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JAKE.  
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#1 | Posted: 1 Aug 2014 14:59
The preppy kids from down the lane,
they know where the candy's at
they know where the candy's at
The cool kids, they're so insane,
but they know where the brandy's at
they know where the brandy's at

So I put on my sweater
and my Cartier watch
& I flaunt all my money
like I'm one of the flock
Because to reap the rewards you've to show 'em you know
that the book & the cover are two separate holes (yeah)

The Goth girl with the plum lipstick
she knows how to rave your world
she knows how to rave your world
If you're looking for a wild time & a hard drive
look for the golden curls
look for the golden curls

So I put on eyeliner
or my douchey tank top
& I walk with the swagger
that I'm something I'm not
Because to reap the rewards you've to show 'em you know
that the book & the cover are two separate holes (yeah)

We trace the candy like a new fallen snow
The brandy showers on us like lil' flecks of gold
The rave is the place we can go to let go
Wild nights & hard drives; I think you already know

Yeah
Gb Beat  
Forums Member
#2 | Posted: 12 Aug 2014 03:41
you're pretty good at it, plus you got a nice vocabulary... but i wonder why have you repeated some lines again n again...
 
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